I’ve been critiquing scripts for clients for twenty plus years.
In that time, I’ve gotten one script that was close to being agent-ready. Writing a screenplay is that difficult. Because finding a producer or agent to agree to read your work happens about as often as being struck by lighting while being eaten by a shark, you don’t want to waste that chance. If you don’t have a team of friends who can give excellent notes, I don’t know what else you can do but pay someone.
I am not in the “encourage ’em and string ’em along and squeeze more money out of them” business. I give masses of notes to propel you into a helpful rewrite.
I charge $1,250.
It’s a ton of money, but you get plenty of bang for that buck.
The key to the process is to repeatedly (three drafts with the book is about the right number) do the Your Screenplay Sucks! checklist before sending me your script. Then, I can concentrate on character and story, not lower brain function hints like “don’t have character names that rhyme,” etc.
You mail me 1.) a self-addressed, stamped envelope, 2.) a one line outline of your script (see Chapter 24 of my book for details), and 3.) a hard copy of the script with “End of Act I”, “Midpoint” and “End of Act II” written on the appropriate pages. You can also email me a .pdf and I’ll print it.
I read the screenplay and write notes all over it. I read it a second time and write on it in different color ink. It’s like having a writing partner go over your script with a fine toothed comb… a sea of red and blue ink.
Then I read it again. This time, I dictate notes to a digital recorder… generally 45+ minutes of thoughts and suggestions. One client transcribed them, and it was c. 20 single spaced pages.
I email you those files and snail-mail the script or scan the written-on draft and email it to you.
After you’ve digested all the notes, we’ll talk and I’ll answer questions.
Over the past twenty years, my clients have been thrilled with the level of detail and overall helpfulness of the notes.
I look forward to helping you with your writing.
will at willakers dot com