Greetings. I’m rawther busy as a highly-paid full time professor of filmmaking, so bad writing is not foremost in my thoughts. Well, it will be in the spring when I start teaching screenwriting. Maybe publishing student homework on line and the fear of public humiliation will get them to run their spell check. Who knows.
Finished my book-in-the-car about a finance guy and the computer he created that runs amok. The Fear Factor by a Mr. Harris. I enjoyed it. It got me back and forth to work. And, as I got it at the library, for FREE.
So, on to the learning… once you set up a character, you have to keep him / her / IT set up. You can’t change characteristics because you want to or worse, NEED to. I will stand over your shoulder and cry, “Foul!”
The hero is breaking into an office building that Bad Computer bought, set up, and where it’s running financial programs at just under the Speed of Light — busy wrecking world financial networks while reaping immense profit for the company. Hero has come with jerrycans of gasoline to burn the building and kill Bad Computer. B.C. has cameras in every office of every building, every room of Hero’s house, and knows everything. B.C. controls everything and is hyper smart. So, when Hero comes up to the Ft. Knox secure building, presents his face to the security camera (sporting gas cans) and retina scan, Bad Computer LETS HIM IN.
Because if the doors don’t open, there’s no other way into the building… or, at least, no way in that the author thought of.
If Bad Computer is so all powerful, how come he doesn’t control the Security system? Hmmmm.
Perhaps take a cue from THANK YOU FOR SMOKING…
Jeff Megall: Sony has a futuristic sci-fi movie they’re looking to make.
Nick Naylor: Cigarettes in space?
Jeff Megall: It’s the final frontier, Nick.
Nick Naylor: But wouldn’t they blow up in an all oxygen environment?
Jeff Megall: Probably. But it’s an easy fix. One line of dialogue. ‘Thank God we invented the… you know, whatever device.’