I don’t know if overdirect is even a word. It doesn’t seem to be recognized by spellcheck. Well, it’s a word now.
I have mentioned this before, but it never hurts to bang a gong repeatedly. Finally the vibrations’ll reach somebody and they’ll perk up and take note.
When your write, you are seeing a movie in your head. Floating above your computer or pad of paper. As you write a scene, you play that scene back and forth in all its richness and glory. Again and again. And as you watch it, you write down what you see. Perfectly natural.
The PROBLEM is that you are watching a movie and then putting ALL OF IT on paper. Do not do that. Only tell us the little bit we have to read in order to get it. One word more is too much. Just because you see it happen up there in front of you, doesn’t mean we need to read it to understand what is going on.
Do not tell us a character’s every movement, head tilt, body turn, walk across the room, etc. in a scene. As you REWRITE your scene (and I know you will!) put on your “Am I Overdirecting” glasses and read the scene again. If you are giving us nuanced character movement, don’t. Tell us only what you must, and shitcan the rest.
are deathtrap words. Sometimes they work for you, but mostly they are quicksand, slowing the reader down by filling her head with images she does not need to GET IT.