I am in the middle of critiquing a screenplay. Did you know that I do that? For anybody! You just give me money and I will give you notes. And your script will be WAY better after you listen to the notes, decide which ones to act on, and do the rewrite. Call now. Operators are standing by.
This particular script is really good. The thing I am noticing while critiquing that is generally rare in scripts I crit, is that the scene description is smooth as silk and requires NO NOTES from me. I am not having to bleed all over the scene description with my trusty red pen. Taking the time to critique scene description… takes time… and this time is taken away from using my massive brain to give notes on story and character.
A monkey can give notes on poorly written scene description, but it is staggeringly rare that I get a script to crit where I don’t have to give notes on the scene description.
This script is getting both barrels of my many, many years of screenwriting and critiquing experience JUST on the story and characters, so it’s really going to improve. The writer (or a monkey) did a hell of a job on the scene description, so I just read it and get it and move on lickety split.
Please, with your scripts, take the time (and it takes a ton of it) to smooth out your scene description. It makes the read faster and vastly less confusing.
It also frees up my mighty brain to think about your story. Which, if you are paying me hard earned after-tax income, is worth it.