When you are reading your script out loud, and Dearly Beloved, I am sure you are reading out loud like religion, be sure to notice obvious crap that you do not absolutely have to tell the reader.
“He hangs up THE PHONE.”
Is he hanging up his nose? If so, do tell us, because that one, we’d never, ever guess.
A phone, drunk as I am, I still could guess THAT.
This writing error drives me nuts, as it’s a sure sign of an amateur who doesn’t realize the reader is not a congenital idiot.
“She leaves THE ROOM.”
Are we not literate? Did you not tell us in the slug line that she was in A ROOM? Do you feel we are morons? Stoned? Have we forgotten in the course of reading a mere half a page, that she was gleefully hoovering that cocaine in A ROOM?
Here, in improper screenplay format, is another delicious example…
Where’s my newspaper?
I’m headed out to the garden to do some weeding.
She exits. Abby looks at Dave.
I don’t have your silly newspaper.
When Abby speaks to Dave, we ASSUME she looks at him. Again, so duuuh. It’s BLOODY OBVIOUS. So, why tell us something we already know?
WHY MAKE THE READER FEEL LIKE A MORON?
It’s not the way to get him / her to like what you’ve written.
Most people like to pretend they are intelligent. Myself included.
Keep that in mind while you’re reading your stuff out loud.