Do not forget what each person in each scene is doing and feeling.
It’s strange to read screenplays where the writer marches through a scene and forgets to focus on a character for a while… the scene goes flat and we lose that character.
When you rewrite a scene, do a little cruise around the room and check in with each character and see if you’ve left them “off camera” too long.
It’s worth it to add this to your “laser beam read” checklist (see Chapter 68 of my amazing book!) for your rewrite… “This time I’ll revisit only the murder mystery…” “This read through, I’ll only look at slug lines…”
“This time, I’ll see if I’ve forgotten a character and what they are doing / feeling for too long during a scene…”
Gives you something to do!